Wednesday, September 8, 2010
Mouse in the Cafe
It all started on a Friday night, it was a cold night and Melissa the mouse was staring at this hole that entered the café. She stared at it debating whether or not to go in. As she was thinking all of these things came to mind, what if she was to go in there and there was a cat, or what is she went and there was a dog what would she do. So after awhile she looked at the hole again and she took a deep breath and she took a small step and she went forward. She continued walking forward and as she did she also continued thinking. Soon she came to a stop and she looked in, to her surprise there was nothing to worry about. She walked into the hole and she found warmth. She was so delighted that she went into the hole she wanted to jump for joy. As she started walking she was also looking for a nice place to sleep. She found a small couch and she rolled up in to a little ball. She went to sleep and she realized she was safe n her new home ( Words :199)
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Tierra, you need to proofread and edit your work before posting it. There are a few run-on sentences that need to be fixed. Small errors like these cost you points. : (
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