Tierra A
4th
4-28-11
Scene One
Characters: Kylie Marie Martinez - white, black, and mexican, 6years old, curly hair, blue/green eyes, freckles, wear brightly colored dresses, white socks and shoes, very frendly, love animals. family lives in rancho bernardo, middle class
Brennan March Anderson-white, sandy red hair, 24 years old, mental illness, attracted to under aged girls who come from poor or middle class families.
Setting: a house underground, in a forest shut off from the world (its been a couple of day)
At Rise: it is 2002, a girl is chained to a bed with a dirty hopeless face.
Kylie
(Thinks to her self)
Is he gone he... he must be... I.. I want my family
( she slowly opens her eyes, only to find him looking at her)
Brennan
Bout time you woke up, not like it matters, I hope you wasn’t dreaming bout your family don’t waste your time they wont come for you, you little bitch, they didn’t want you in the first place,
Kylie
(starts to cry)
Don’t say that
4th
4-28-11
Scene One
Characters: Kylie Marie Martinez - white, black, and mexican, 6years old, curly hair, blue/green eyes, freckles, wear brightly colored dresses, white socks and shoes, very frendly, love animals. family lives in rancho bernardo, middle class
Brennan March Anderson-white, sandy red hair, 24 years old, mental illness, attracted to under aged girls who come from poor or middle class families.
Setting: a house underground, in a forest shut off from the world (its been a couple of day)
At Rise: it is 2002, a girl is chained to a bed with a dirty hopeless face.
Kylie
(Thinks to her self)
Is he gone he... he must be... I.. I want my family
( she slowly opens her eyes, only to find him looking at her)
Brennan
Bout time you woke up, not like it matters, I hope you wasn’t dreaming bout your family don’t waste your time they wont come for you, you little bitch, they didn’t want you in the first place,
Kylie
(starts to cry)
Don’t say that
Brennan
( Angry from her talking back, he moves to slap her)
did anyone tell you to speak.....
( Angry from her talking back, he moves to slap her)
did anyone tell you to speak.....
Kylie
(shakes her head no)
Brennan
Then why did you? you know what that means..... another day with out food, you will learn life is not all happiness.
(shakes her head no)
Brennan
Then why did you? you know what that means..... another day with out food, you will learn life is not all happiness.
Kylie
(She starts crying hysterically)
no! please!
I am sorry!
(She starts crying hysterically)
no! please!
I am sorry!
Brennan
you should have thought bout that before you spoke out.
you should have thought bout that before you spoke out.
Kylie
(she close her eyes again)
(she close her eyes again)
Brennan
(he slaps her)
you little bitch you have slept enough, stay up!, you are really starting to irritate me!
(he slaps her)
you little bitch you have slept enough, stay up!, you are really starting to irritate me!
Kylie
(She sits up)
(She sits up)
Brennan
You must like getting me mad don’t you....
I know what you want
(he storms to her)
You must like getting me mad don’t you....
I know what you want
(he storms to her)
Kylie
(Scream)
No! Don’t!
Curtain close
(Scream)
No! Don’t!
Curtain close
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Awe....that's messed up. I mean it's like good but messed up in a different tense...you know what i mean
ReplyDeleteI know what you mean, pretty good play.
ReplyDeletePretty good play Tierra keep up the good work. I think you should add a little more detail.
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your scene one. Be sure to add a bit more deatails and I think you added the B word a bit too much throughout the scene, but other than that you did a great job.Keep it up.
ReplyDeleteI liked the play a lot, on the next scene that you write I would like to read more drama. You got me wanting to keep on reading the play. I liked it a lot.
ReplyDeleteI only put the B word in there twice, thank you very much
ReplyDeleteThis sounds like it is going to be really interesting. It also sounds kind of scary.
ReplyDeleteThat is so scary! I say because I don't weant to hear a bad ending..I say you should make it to where the next scene she beats the crap out of him!
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